Globalisation merely serves as a conduit and an
accelerator encouraging consumption. Expanding international trade has quickened
deforestation and pollution, which contribute to climate and environmental changes. As a result, global warming has a potential of causing disruptions as severe as the Great
depression and World War I and II.
Even though there has been an increase in awareness of
natural disasters and suffering, and some nations taking action, the rest of
the world has to see how intertwined and interdependent countries are. The consequences of global warming should not be neglected.
History has shown that there can be change if governments use their
power to lead a change.
Hi, Bennie
ReplyDeleteThe summary is so cool!!! When I read through your summary, it gives me a feeling that this is a good summary =)
Some parts you may need to change a bit
-consistency, change "globalisation" to "globalization"
-line 1: " Chanda explains the harmful effects and benefits globalisation has directly and indirectly brought."
you may change it to " Chanda explains the harmful effects and benefits, which globalization has directly and indirectly brought."
- The second last paragraph, I think the sentence is too long. You may change the sentence structure a bit to make it clearer.
- Last point which I also suggested to clarice, you can add your word count at last.
Other than that, I saw the posting time is at 05:46? you did not sleep yesterday? OMG, take care =)
Hi Bennie!
ReplyDeleteThis is such a clear summary. I think you have point out the harmful effects and benefits of globalisation clearly.
Some suggestions;
1. First sentence, Chanda explains…. -> Chanda (2007) explains…
2. Second paragraph, second sentence, I would suggest changing it to, ‘Expanding international trade increases deforestation…. ‘
3. ‘Even though there has been an increase in awareness of natural disasters and suffering, and some nations taking action,’ -> Maybe rearrange the sentence to make it flow smoothly.
I'm not so sure how though, but maybe, ‘Even with the increase in awareness and suffering of natural disasters, as well as actions taken by some nations…’
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naz
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